Saturday, April 2, 2011

Epic Follower Blogfest / Contest

Shelley Watters at Is It Hot In Here Or Is It This Book? is hosting an Epic Follower Blogfest / Contest. The prize is a full manuscript request from agent Suzie Townsend. On April 1 and 2, pitches are posted for crituque by other participants. On April 3, the polished pitches are entered in the comment section of Shelley's contest post

Without further ado, here's my 140 character pitch.  Please bash away - I've really had to hack away at it to get it this short.

Title: One Last Time
Genre: Contemporary YA
Word Count: 50,000

Certain death awaits disease-ravaged Bailey if she leaves the hospital, but that’s a consequence she accepts if it means she can enjoy one last day with her friends.

That was hard.  Thanks for critiquing!


  1. Hmm... I like the story idea, and of course I do not know your novel, but after reading your pitch it makes me think of a story that could be told in just a few pages. What exactly is the conflict? If she already knows her fate then the conflict is already resolved. Does that make any sense?

  2. Or maybe this is one of those stories that begins at the end when the MC dies? Or she is somehow going to survive because she leave the hospital. It certainly gives me pause to know more. Good job!

  3. i am interested but she must have really cool friends to risk death to hang out with them. desease ravaged sounds pretty dirty though...
    douglas esper

  4. I think you could cut 'disease-ravaged', actually. and I agree with haleywhitehall -- she leaves the hospital, has a great day, and dies? What's the conflict?

    Good luck!

  5. Your pitch just about broke my heart. Poor kid :-(

    So tough to help when I don't know more of the story. Instead of disease-ravaged, maybe give us a hint of what it is she has. If instead of leaving hospital to hang out with friends she was trying to get a kiss (or whatever) from hot crush... that would make it more irresistible!

    Good luck!